Eh, alright.
Many things could be fixed with this song. To start off with, the hi-hats are too choppy, and shouldn't be like that cause they destroy the atmosphere of the song.
Another thing, some of the stutters in the melody are wrong and at the wrong places and make it sound like you're trying too hard just to put stutters in there, you don't need stutters. Also, the melody I believe you told me that you make, is off key. The last couple notes (1:06-1:08) just sound all over the place.
And now the piano... the notes aren't really placed all that good, giving the piano an electronic sound to it. You need to vary them more, compared to having 3 right next to each other in quick succession.
The bass... don't do the bass like that. Just no, lol. You can use that type of melody for an extra background/rhythmic synth, but don't use it for the bass, cause it disrupts the kick.
Also, the kick is wayyy too weak. for these kinds of songs, you need a MUCH more powerful kick.
Overall, it was OK. Not too great, but not all that bad either. I liked the melody, but I feel you could have done a much better job with the song.
{DJ-HLS}